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8.12.2010

Best and rest of the friends..

Someone said,a friend in need is a friend indeed..
But why, why the hell they always cheat..
They don't know,how it really hurts..
They are your friends coz of your shoes and shirts..
They come to you for a treat or for the notes of physics or chem..
Or if the previous ones have left them..
I don't say that all of them are cheat..
There are some trustworthy friends whom we hardly meet..
They are mostly one in lakhs..
Not like the rest of them turning their backs..
It may also happen,your so called best friend ditches you..
He isn't your best friend,your best friend is the one who always misses you..
Remembering a best friend tears drop from your eyes..
And remembering you he also cries..
If your best friend gets hurt your heart pains..
And when you both cry accompanying you the sky also rains....
-OMAR CHAUDHARI(X-student of gmvv)

3 comments:

UnknownSunday, August 15, 2010
HI OMAR,
NICE COOL FUNNY BLOG....
STILL AS YOUR SENIOR I HAVE A SUGGESTION FOR YOU :

1)RULE ONE OF POETRY WRITE FROM YOUR HEART FORGET THE RHYME... IT DOES NOT MATTER IF YOUR POEM DOES NOT HAVE MANY RHYMING WORDS BUT IT DOES MATTER IF YOUR POEMS BRING TEARS IN THE EYES OF READERS.

2)DONOT FORGET YOUR BASIC, YOUR LAST LINE
WHEN YOU BOTH CRY.....IS GRAMMATICALLY WRONG. THERE SHOULD BE A COMMA AFTER CRY AND AFTER YOU

And when you both cry, accompanying you, the sky also rains....

AND
wHEN YOU REMEMBER a best friend, tears drop from your eyes..

3) NO SHORTCUTS. DONT USE COZ...BECAUSE...
4)There are some trustworthy friends whom we hardly meet..
take this line you wrote ..this line in a level is good but for someone like me it expresses contradiction..try this now
There are some trustworthy friends, but whom we hardly meet..

5)It may also happen,your so called best friend ditches you..
what is a comma doing here? use that in cases like these...

Take the last second line
If your best friend gets hurt your heart pains..
and try this
f your best friend is hurt your heart pains..
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UnknownSunday, August 15, 2010
hi try this poem by me
http://www.poemhunter.com/poem/i-remember-myself-2/
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AkashSunday, November 14, 2010
Zabardast bhai Great Poems aur sale school me kabhi bola nahi
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We Humans...

God made tommorow and today

also the night and the day

he created the land and the bay

Lord made you with clay

and sent you to the earth,when its colour was grey

He made the shining sun for you to make hay

not to go home and lay

your words should be perfect don't use 'may'

Lord gave you special beauty,don't use olay

let the others say whatever they want to say

on the judgement day they'll have to pay

I advise you to follow the Lord's way

On the judgement day,he'll lift you in an ice tray

after that you'll be ableto count sun's each ray.............................................................................-OMAR CHAUDHARI (X-STUDENT OF G.M.V.V.)

For you..

For you

(your name),Hi! hello there

yes, this poem you have to bare

I wrote this poem for you

t's not the old one it's new

you thought that I copy them from somewhere

I know for my poem's you don't care

It takes me hours to write

please dont take it that much lite

my every poem has my feelings

(10th line)but you only know bout your necklaces and ear-rings

you think that i search them on internet

my poem's contain human feelings not of the puppet

I'am sorry for the 10th line

don't worry be fine

not only you suspected me as a cheater

but also my poems every reader

this poem is written to teach them a lesson

I advise you to throw away your inner demon

I'am so sorry!!!!!

Caution!!! Warning!!!!Note: The thing to be noticed is that the 10th line is only for female not for the male.....

My Broken Heart

Somebody broke my heart

with a shining sharp dart

I tried and tried

but she avoided me at another side

I loved her like a pearl upon the sea

but she gave no response to me

I tried to leave but with no success

it was harder than a game of chess

I thought it will end in a good result

but it ended in my insult

I felt bad,

also a little bit sad

in anger, I gave itup

and also broke my favourite cup

I felt pity for myself

and placed my broken heart in a shelf

I headed backward

feeling very awkward

I left my studies

'n' also stopped talking to my buddies

I felt ashamed

coz i was named

how my heart scatters

which to her not at all matters

I can't write any more

my throat is going sore

having a mixed feelingmy eyes are weeping;-(

My introduction

Hello! to introduce myself i.e. me

my name is Omar Chaudhari

Yeah, I know my name is a precious take

more than a yummy delicious cake

Yes, there's lot more in my name

love,friendship,money 'n' fame

now leave my name

let's start the pretty game

this game is of poetry

not the one you thought of tree-tree

this game is like the new service TATA-DOCOMO

which changes your life in a second with a demo

okay let's begin with you

the time you are given is very few

have you seen the movie 'SAW'

the same is my law

no duties,no rulesonly ropes,fans and stools

which will help you to hang yourself up

with no loss of your blood like ketchup

now,I should stop my speech

and the thing to be done to you is teach

Only, how to play the game

I'am only the 1 ,for your death you should blame.

Tata,bye-bye, go on and enjoy with that scary toy
.........................................................................................................